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Until the Day Finally Reach Us by ~Flyerscurse:iconFlyerscurse:



“UNTIL THE DAY FINALLY REACH US”


“What it is so precious about life that we fear the death…”
        “What it is so good about love that we suffer for it…”

First step: “Doing recon”

-What it was that?-asked to himself the blonde shin obi meanwhile trying to wake up himself- if I recall there it was a forest and… nope, nothing else, can’t remember a thing about it. –surely he didn’t remember the dream that he was having last night but by his standard of most likely nightmares than good dreams this was okay- ahhmnmn, slept like a fox… I wonder if I have some instant ramen left…-while doing the   search for the remaining food supplies Naruto start to remember how long has been since he left the village, or what it was left of the village itself- don’t want to keep think about that- but the memories did not faded away and kept in his mind like a show of pictures dancing in his mind, and the two weeks/expired instant ramen didn’t help at all, but bring back memories of a friendly old man and his daughter that always have a bowl of his favorite ramen for him…, he threw away what is was left of the ramen and started to pick up his things of the floor, took a deep breath and headed out of the cave he was hiding at the moment- man I am getting better at finding this kind of hiding like places.
Been lonely at this very moment wasn’t such a bad thing, but jumping from a branch to another branch all by yourself was kind of melancholic, the good part of been alone was the fact that he was able of distracting himself of remembering by concentrating on the jumping, the bad part was that wherever he left the village on a mission someone else was on charge of finding the way to follow –don’t go there, I still don’t want to remember-
Why Inari? Remember stuff from past is not always a bad thing- just a second after Naruto notice the presence he was there -Auron, I knew this strange presence it was yours- Don’t know about presence and stuff I just follow smell- Naruto stared for a second to this person, after all who was him? He did meet him a couple of months ago, while fighting the nibi, presented himself as Auron from the other continent, that sounded like a fake name but Naruto couldn’t say something because he did not tell him his true name instead he used the name of an old acquaintance  of him. Since the day he left Konoha he was letting behind him all of the things that make him, himself and his name were the first but not the easier thing to let go.
Hey Inari, where do you think you are going? –Asked the strange dark haired Auron- I was thinking of resupplying myself since I just run out of rame… I meant food- Hu? Food? No, no I was talking about you letting the cave we were using full of your trail?-
-Ha, that is, mnm, I always was the worst in the stealth class, but hey, how were you able to notice that since you are blind?- asked Naruto.
-Duh, not because I am blind that means that I can’t see, if not how I am supposed to do anything that I do? –That was true, since the day they met Naruto was still wondering how he was able to see without his eyes, Naruto has meted blind persons in the past or people who do not needed to see, but they infused their other senses with chakra or just tuned they senses for covering the lack of sight but him was a different case, actually Naruto couldn’t feel any kind of chakra coming from him just a strange kind of an energy very different from what he knew, and for make things worst when his pet was with him you could just swear that he was not blind-
-True that, and where is that pet of yours?
-Leo? He is scouting far from here, and he is not my pet he is more like my guardian spirit, is my Nahualt.
-Your what?
-Nah, just forget about that, but I was told that ninjas were silent warriors that attack at night, they move unnoticed and that is very hard to tell if one was there in the same room with you and to tell you the truth you not strike me as a ninja, more like a true straight fighter but not a ninja.
-Naruto did not liked the way this conversation was going, what it was this? The ten question game? Not that he not wanted to keep getting info on Auron but not wanted to tell him about himself –
-Argh… (Count to ten…) Hey? If you are not from this continent how do you know about ninjas?
-Ah? Didn’t I tell you before?, oh well, many years ago there it was this huge storm that lasted like tree days and when it finally over the Fishermen found a man almost dead, floating in the sea holding onto woods that seemed to be the rest of a ship.
They brought him to the town, healed him and waited to him to recover but when he finally wake up nobody could understand him, he was speaking this strange language of yours, took us a month or so to teach him or own language, he was in a state of disbelief of where the storm has took him. He wanted to return  here as soon of his body allowed him but no ship of our country was coming here and he did not have enough money to do so. Hey I am starting to like to tell histories while traveling. Well, the time passed, some good other bad things happened, he was now really old and still wanted to travel back to his homeland and I was like doing nothing better with my life, so I offered him to bring him back but he died before everything was ready… I couldn’t keep my promise while he was alive so made it the travel anyway and bring his ashes with me…
-That’s some story…
-Yeah…
He ended his story with a sad voice; Naruto was still processing all of it Auron was not a bad person and showed to be of worth having around since his scouting, searcher and stealth abilities were in a higher level, his lack of value on the battlefield was not really a problem since Naruto was… well Naruto, even with the fact that he was leaving behind all of he once was, he still needed his combat abilities to correct some mistakes and even when he hated him he still needed the Nine tailed beast that resides deep in him… at least as long for the mission to take, his own mission, his last mission, after this he could put an end to all his suffering…
Hey, Inari, hey Inari, I am talking to you.
-Hu? What?
-Inari… are you there?
-What?
-Were you not listening? I am telling you, is almost noon we should rest now; eat something if we wait for an hour we can get to next town by the sunset.
-Okay, lest stop, wait a minute is the next town that far?
-Well yeah, you wanted to avoid the roads so we take the longest way trough the forest.
-Ah, yeah (well excuse me but I am a wanted ninja so I have to take care) how do you know how long it would take us?
-Do you remember Leo? He is already there.
-How do you contact him?
-That’s not story for this moment we should search for some food, since we both have not rations left.
- That’s fine with me.
Both parted different ways to search for the much needed food, he was definitely hungry but his mind seemed to wanted drag more attention to his memories, it was strange how a falling leaf, a bird singing, a cloud in the heaven or even the cracks on the trees could bring back memories that he wanted to forget. It hurt too much for him to take… but he has to hold until everything was ready, then he could just stop feeling anything anymore…
-Hey took you long enough, did you find something Inari?
-Nah, nothing…
-Bad luck I guess… have a seat, I found these, is just berries and peanuts but can’t hope for much better in this place.
-I can’t complain.
After they have eaten their meager food rested for a moment and restarted the route.
-And hey Inari, are we going to keep asking each other questions and stuff?
-Don’t really want to.
-Men, I just started to enjoy telling stories along the way just to past time…
Keeping the communication at minimum and the minimum been cero, they both traveled until the sun set, and the city was at sight.

-Okay, this is the plan; we are just to buy food supplies, and not to make a fuss!!!
-Okay Inari, I promise you that I am going to behave.
-Well, tha’s good.
-But why? I came here to learn among other important things, you know?
-Because when you want to pass without being seen you must not outstand.
- (sight) mnmn… that comes from the men that has blonde hair… and is wearing some suspicious cloak…
-Ah o yeah!!! Henge no jutsu!! That is, dark hair just like yours.
-That’s some way of changing… but the cloak still looks suspicious…
-Is not, is just cloth to travel, everyone uses.
-If you say so… hey are you going to buy again that dried ramen stuff?
-Is instant ramen, and not, we are going to buy different stuff…
-That’s perfect with me, didn’t like too much of…
-You…   fine, I really will like that we could take different paths and search you for food and I for Intel but I don’t trust you alone in a town, so we are gone to stick together, the only thing is that I don’t know this town so we must search as soon as possible for stores and so and a place where we could get info, it’s already too late, but I don’t want to leave things for tomorrow.
-Man… and here I was already spotted some places that i would love to do some “research”.
-What?
-Leo has been doing recon since noon and…
-So you know where everything is?
-Well, Leo is already sleeping but I got all the info that he collected from this town…
-One of these days you will have to explain me how this “connection” of yours works.

And so they started their task of resupplying them and Naruto was carrying on his duty of watching that Auron didn’t pull to much attention on them. Getting Intel and the same time trying to not look suspicious it was always a hard thing to do, but for this time it was an easy thing to do… After the battle against Pain in Konoha, Naruto left the village been unable to face anyone after all the destruction and massacre that he caused after becoming the kiuuby.

With Pain’s dead the only problem left was the true leader of Akatsuki, but he proved to be a though adversary so during the fight against him Naruto was unable to defeat him but able to delay his plans by destroying the container of the chakra in which all the tailed beast that Akatsuki captured were held; but Naruto didn’t expect that after the destruction of this device all of the Tailed beasts were released and recover their own bodies and that they wanted to start destroying everything that crossed their paths, so Naruto took by himself the mission of Killing/destroy all of the released beasts.
Of course Naruto knew that this was his fault, and the ninja world that once he wanted to change for the best was been send to a living hell for all of this destruction caused by the Bijus, but he didn’t wanted to seal every one of the Bijus, sealing them or rather creating new jinchurikus (not that he knew how) was not the solution this will only make easy the job for the Akatsukis, what it was needed is destroying the Bijus, eradicate the problem from the source and so without them the plan of the Akatsukis would fail.
He  possessed the power necessary for this mission, only him possessed the necessary power, ergo it was his responsibility, so it was not only the quilt that he carry, been the cause of the problem but the he the only one that could end this.
With all of this commotion it was not hard to find someone talking about been seeing a tailed beast causing devastation in some place, so finding the beast appeared to be a easy thing but it was a hard thing reach the destroyed place and been able to find the beast since they didn’t spend much time after destroying, three times he failed to locate the beast responsible of the destruction, helping the survivors was a tempting thing to do but he couldn’t allow to be spotted, and after weeks of search he was able to find the Two tailed cat. It wasn’t an easy task he did have to use all of the fox chakra mixed with the sage mode to kill that giant two tailed cat. But the fight took his share of destruction; the little village in which the fight took place was erased from the face of earth. This was the true fact of life… all of the actions that you make caused another “actions” nothing was complete good, nothing was complete bad… but a sad and sick harmony of light and darkness, an ever present ying yang, an eternal mandala always rotating…
-Hey, Inari, you are spacing out again.
But undoing the bad that he caused was not enough for Naruto…
-Hola, Inari?
-He himself was to be “sacrified” along with the mission…
-HEY!!! INARI, EARTH TO INARI…
-Hu? What?
-You were like daydreaming… but it is night so…
-ah? Oh? Sorry… I was too lost in thoughts…
-Truly, men… while you were “lost” I finished buying all of we need and behave myself… you were walking like a zombie or something… thought for a second that you were already dead…
-Sorry again… well now is just try to hear some news…
-Sorry he says… can’t be helped, but I guess that finding a way do defeat those massive amounts of energy things (how do you called?) must take a lot of time thinking.
-Shsh… they are tailed beast, and they are made of chakra, keep quiet nobody must know…
-You know? That act of the lonely/serious/hard/cool hero doesn’t suit you… you look must like the showoff hero that saves the day and spend the nights youknow how…
-What?!!! I am neither of those… where the hell do you get that idea? Come here I am going to show you some manners.
-Hahaha, lol, only if you can catch me…
-Damn he is fast… come back here…
That was one of the strange things about Auron that kept Naruto still wondering about this “friend” of him… he was not show any proof of combat abilities yet, he neither admit that he was one good fighter but say that he lacked of fight abilities but was indeed one hell of a racer even at forest or trough though places he kept that damn speed that make him look more like a wild beast than a human.
Not been able of chasing him, and dragging attention on him, Naruto just give up on the chase and make a point of teaching him good manners in a beat up once he returned. What was most important now was to find a trace of any biju, so he started to look for old newspapers in trash cans and headed for some bars. Avoiding the roads was a precaution for not been found out, sure he can do some henge   no jutsu, but his disguise could be found out by any good ninja, the bad part of this precaution was indeed the lack of news on what’s happening, so he was just going to pretend to have a drink and wait for someone to spill some information.

Naruto did not know where he got wrong… but most of the mans in the bar seems to think that the fact that Naruto didn’t want to invite them for a drink or two was in fact bad manners for an outsider, and they were happily go and teach him what good manners were a precious thing, and the teaching way tonight was going to be beat-up the crap of the outsider. Naruto also did not know that Auron also find that landing in the middle of a previous fight between some gang members was bad manners and the only way of excusing himself was letting the gang members beat up the crap out of him.
-Okay guys, I definitely feel sorry for landing here, and apologize myself for doing so… but I am not good at fights and I really don’t like to be beaten, could we leave things with just a “I am sorry”?
-NO.
-Well, just to be sure… I don’t really like fight… Ahora y hasta que pase esta maldición, ahora y hasta que acabe este maldito destino, confiare mi vida a Aries….
©2009 ~Flyerscurse
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Author's Comments

That's the lamest ever thing that i write, but liked, Ha is a naruhina fanfic you just have to wait, if someone says is a shi.. I am going to keep it up hahaha

disclaimer, Naruto, and Naruto references all of them belong to Masashi Kishimoto.
I don't anything besides my house so don't take away from me...
ah, Auron is an OC, but is not his real name...

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:iconbasketballgurl14:
um what does the last sentence say??? lol
pretty good sotry overall, seems interesting... a couple spelling things made it some waht hard to read

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Hidden Love--- How long can the number one most hyperactive ninja keep a secret relationship with the Hyuuga heir and Konoha\'s most shyest ninja?
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:iconflyerscurse:
That is the fact that I don't speech English... I am from Guatemala... and it's been like eight years since I took an English course...Now and until this curse last,now and until the end of this cursed destiny, I'll trust my life to Aries...
took a word or two from Getbackers

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Konoha will scream "this is madness" and I will whisper "this is justice"
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"...Dreams have the nasty habit of become nightmares when you are not looking..." Max Payne
:iconbasketballgurl14:
ahhh i see! well for not being fluent in english- you are still very good at it!

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Hidden Love--- How long can the number one most hyperactive ninja keep a secret relationship with the Hyuuga heir and Konoha\'s most shyest ninja?
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:iconflyerscurse:
thank you...

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Konoha will scream "this is madness" and I will whisper "this is justice"
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"...Dreams have the nasty habit of become nightmares when you are not looking..." Max Payne
:iconsleepwalking101:
For a first chapter, this was good. And it's a very good effort considering your first language isn't English. Can I give you some tips and advice though?

I understand the incorrect grammar, and that's fine, but my biggest pet peeve (at all, not just with this story) is story structure. When people speak, use " (eg. "I am Naruto, dattebayo!") and start a new paragraph every time someone new talks. It just makes things neater and ideas are easier to follow.

Also, just a quick English lesson, when writing a sentence, it always looks nicer in the active voice. For example, you wrote:

He ended his story with a sad voice.

Active voice is like this:

His voice was sad as he ended his story.

It's read much easier when the 'who' is written before the 'what'. The 'who' in this case being him and his voice, and the 'what' being the story.

Overall, a good start, and with practice, your English grammar will improve. Keep going!

PS. I squealed like the goofy girl I am when I read the words 'ergo' and 'eradicate'. Such lovely words, and you used them in the right context, good job!

Wow, long comment. Sorry.

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I read, I write...and I write a lot. Check it out, I'm doing the 100 Themes Challenge, writing 100 stories on the NaruHina pairing. [link] Wish me luck!!

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Thank you, thank you, I should definitely, send you the link before I wrote the second chapter... I like the change in the line "His voice..." (in a sad history, I never was a good student in Spanish either so...) thank you for your advance review.
Then again I must bother you with the second and I am hoping for you review.
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Konoha will scream "this is madness" and I will whisper "this is justice"
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"...Dreams have the nasty habit of become nightmares when you are not looking..." Max Payne
:iconthadoctor17:
Okay, well I promised a review, and I shall give it:

First of all, I can tell you this much, the way you tell the story, with your little subtle hints, and a few I can already tell are not so subtle(don't wanna reveal anything for the happily ignorant readers). It's well designed, and the general happenings all make sense.

I am a little jealous. I read some of your sentences and I think: "That was awful English" and have to reread it several times before I understand your point, but other times I read a sentence and think: "How does he use complex English so well?" My main example of that is one of the first lines...

'Been lonely at this very moment wasn’t such a bad thing, but jumping from a branch to another branch all by yourself was kind of melancholic.'

The only real beef is that you meant 'being' instead of 'been' but I got the point in a rather dignified sense. 90% of people on here probably don't understand the word melancholic, but you used it correctly, and really made me feel the loneliness of moving through a forest alone. Well done for that.

The main problems are simple grammar mistakes, and tense mistakes. I like you use this as a general rule, when writing in past tense, which you are most of the time, end every verb(eg. said, walked, moved.) with -ed. Just use that as a general rule and your tenses should come out fine.

Also, what the other reviewer said about the dialogue. Quotation marks(" ") are much easier to understand in English, and whenever someone new talks, start a new paragraph.

Sorry this is so long, the next one will be less so because I'll have less to introduce if you've read this one. I'll try to get to reading the next one tomorrow or sometime this weekend if I get a chance.

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:iconthadoctor17:
Wow, I just realized I didn't mention the actual story at all:

It is beautiful, to be honest. The idea of Naruto releasing the Biju on the world and having to chase them all down and kill them is an amazingly unique idea, and something I never even considered. Him leaving his past to save the world after it practically being his fault for almost destroying it is a wonderful metaphor for how his life was destroyed by the people around him, and then saved by the same people(mostly Sasuke and Sakura). Not sure if you meant it that way, but it makes me really think.

The idea of Naruto traveling with an OC after leaving his past, especially an OC who is apparently not a ninja, is unique and probably the best way to introduce an OC. I really have nothing bad to say about the story itself. I'm very interested in what's going to happen next.

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YAY!!!!!!!!!!! hahaha, the real problem is that it been years since I took a class of english and I speech spanish... thank you, thank you very much. and if you want a spoiler about what you said in the note i can give you one... (I am saving this comment)

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"...Dreams have the nasty habit of become nightmares when you are not looking..." Max Payne

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